This morning we had 40 minutes to write about anything we wanted from this we are going to get some writing goals for the term here is what I wrote.
Entering the paintball field as we spilt up to attack the other team to capture their flag. Our team stuck together like we were a Spec Op team. It felt like we were back in world war 1 again. From the corner of my eye I get the sense that there's someone coming to attack and BANG I shot him right in the chest.
My sister runs and gets the flag and I back her up by Shooting every target that gets in our way. Everyone gets to the flag only 1 of our teammate was taken down. My uncle yells out ‘go go go’ as a command for us to head back to the base sprinting like we were running away from a lion and jumping obstacles like a free runner.
Then when we left our team got to have McDonald's and the losing team had to eat 2 big Ben pies each.
The thing that I like about my writing is the metaphor for example sprinting like we were running away from a lion and jumping obstacles like a free runner
My goals are to make my hook more better and to have more vocabulary. To have more punctuation.